there are somethings that is the roles of men and women.one of the things,both men and women are bringing children to the world and providing a safe secure environment for them.however,the roles of men and women in my society in terms of inside and outside family.

the first difference between the roles of men and women is inside family.men must not only work hard to support his family for financial problems but also protect their wife and children from bad things.moreover, they need share as much as possible in the domestic responsibilities.therefore,they are breadwinners.on the other hand,women must both encourage their husband when he has troubles and keep the happiness of family.they spend almost time being husewives such as running household,taking care of children and doing housework.as a result,they are homemakers

the second difference is outside family.men must work much more than women.they work some jobs what is heavy and demand much strength.because they can connect and manage people,specially colleague properly,they usually sit may high positions in the society.in addition,they have have a lot of chance to promote,so they can guarantee the success of plans.however,women work some jobs that is siple and dosent demand much strength.they sit common positions,yet they make their work more flexibility.they have less chance to promote than men in the society.

in general,there are something that is the roles of men and women.in the society,we need be the combination of both men and women.definitely,we need find out good factors in each person

 

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Hello, Thuy. Here are some comments of mine. Hope that they can somewhat help you.

there are somethings something that is the roles of men and women. one of the things, both men and women are bringing children to the world and providing a safe secure safe/ secure (don’t use both words) environment for them. however, the roles of men and women in my society in terms of inside and outside family.

the first difference between the roles of men and women is inside family. men must not only work hard to support his family for financial problems but also protect their wife and children from bad things. moreover, they need share as much as possible in the domestic responsibilities. therefore, they are breadwinners. on the other hand, women must both encourage their husband when he has troubles and keep the happiness of family. they spend almost time being husewives housewives such as running household, taking care of children and doing housework. as a result, they are homemakers

the second difference is outside family.men must work much more than women. they work do some jobs what is heavy heavy jobs and demand much strength which demand much strength. because they can connect and manage people, specially especially colleague properly, they usually sit may high positions have high status in the society. in addition, they have a lot of chance to promote get promotion/ to be promoted,so they can guarantee the success of plans. however, women work some jobs do/ take over  some jobs that is siple simple and dosent does not demand much strength. they sit common positions do not hold high positions, yet they make their work more flexibility flexible. they have less chance to promote than men in the society.

in general, there are something that is the roles of men and women. in the society, we need be the combination of both men and women. definitely, we need find out good factors in each person

 

I think your writing need to be improved in some following points:

- Vocabulary: you should use various words.

- I think your introduction needs to be improved:

there are somethings something that is the roles of men and women. (this is not a sentence). one of the things, both men and women are bringing children to the world and providing a safe secure safe/ secure (don’t use both words) environment for them. however, the roles of men and women in my society in terms of inside and outside family.

The existence of men and women create balance for the family and society. Though both men and women bring children to the world and provide them with a safe environment, the roles of men and women are different in terms of inside and outside family.

 

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