Hey peeps,
I wasn't here for a while due to a lot of work and adventures in my life.  But I've noticed that my English has become a bit bad, so I have to relearn it again ^^
Well recently I thought about a poem, I will try to write it again here. Could someone correct it please? I would like to know where my mistakes are.

I hear you talk
But never ask
I hear you talk
Talk, but say nothing
Words, nothing but words
I've heard it all before
Nothing but empty phrases
They do not hurt for they are not from your core

You want to tell me what I must do or what not
where does it start and where does it end
I hate your lies, they are just rot!
I hate your double standard
And your so-called freedom, I don't give a damn
So I live by nonstandard

What is forbidden, what is legal?
What is degenerate, what normal?
What shall I hear?
With which ear?
What shall I see?
What shall I be?
Whom may I hate?
Whom shall I bait?
Where may I go?
Remember things from how much ago?
Whom shall I love?
And whom see from above?
Whom shall I ask questions
To get suggestions?
What can I say?
How long can I stay?

If I want to talk
Then I do it, you can not balk me
You don't shut me up
If I have to fight
Then I do it as star bright
No one makes me bow down
Because I hate your lies even if they are from the crown
Your double standard
And your so-called freedom, I don't give a damn
So I live by nonstandard

Whom may I hate?
whom can I cheat at?
And who censured those who lie to me?

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Comment by Chesa Art on January 21, 2014 at 11:06

:) Thanks.

Comment by kaizen on January 21, 2014 at 10:33

Welcome back.

Comment by Chesa Art on January 20, 2014 at 13:20

OMG the worst! So much mistakes! Anyway, thank you very much for the correction :)

Comment by Mishaikh on January 20, 2014 at 7:39

I hear you talk
But never ask
I hear you talk
Talk, but say nothing
Words, meer words

I've heard them all before
Nothing but empty phrases
They do not hurt for they are not from your core

You want to tell me what I must do or what mustn’t
where does it start and where it ends
I hate your lies, they are just rot!
I hate your double standard
And your so-called freedom, I don't give a damn
So I live by nonstandard

What is forbidden, what is permissible?
What is degraded, what is normal?
What  I shall hear?

With which ear?
What I shall see?
What I shall be?
Whom I may hate?
Whom I shall bait?
Where I may go?
Remember things from how long ago?
Whom I shall love?
And whom I see from above?
Whom I shall ask questions?
To get suggestions.

What I can say?
How long I can stay?

If I want to talk
Then I do it, you can not balk me
You can’t shut me up
If I have to fight
Then I do it as star bright
No one makes me bow down
Because I hate your lies even if they are from the crown
Your double standard
And your so-called freedom, I don't give a damn
So I live by nonstandard

Whom I may hate?
whom I can cheat at?
And who censured those who lied to me?

(and who censures those who lies to me?)

 

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