The house was dark and the rooms were in disarray when Jeff opened the door. Suddenly, Victoria saw something moving inside, she felt afraid. Slowly she followed her Dad, passed the kitchen into the living room. Jeff put Lily in front of the fireplace; he broke a chair and lit a fire. Victoria looked out the window, “Dad, there is a woman outside; her feet are not on the ground”. But her Daddy didn’t hear, walked out to the bathroom, he sat on the floor and cried. He seemed so desperate; he took a gun from his pocket and checked for the bullets. There were three left. He put it back to his pocket and rubbed his face. He walked back into the living room toward Victoria.”Victoria, give me your glasses,” he took her glasses.”Daddy, I can’t see,” she tried to take the glasses from her Dad.”It’s okay, honey, come,” he hugged her, and then he asked her to look out the window again. He moved backward and pointed the gun to her head. Victoria didn’t realize it, she kept looking out the window. Jeff slowly pulled the trigger, his hand was trembling, “I am sorry, honey. I love you,”. Suddenly, something bumped and strangled him, took him into the dark. Victoria turned her head, but she couldn’t see clearly, she just called her Dad, “Dad, what’s going on?..Dad..Dad. But her Daddy was gone. She was trembling and ran toward Lily and hugged her. Lily was crying, “Don’t cry Lily, I will take care of you.”.

Meanwhile, someone drove his car very fast. He was Lucas, Jeff’s brother driving to Jeff’s house. A police had called him. He arrived at Jeff’s house. It was surrounded by the police, he tried to get in but a police stopped him and told him what had happened. Lucas sat on the ground covering his face, “Jeff where are you? How can it happen to you? I will find you no matter how.” He looked so sad thinking about Jeff and his two nieces.

Deep into the forest, in a house, Victoria was still hugging her sister, Lily. The fire in the fire place was small and smaller. The room was getting dark. They heard something moving toward them, but they couldn’t see. And a berry was trundling into them. “Look, Lily it’s a berry.”Victoria took the berry and gave it to Lily……(to be continued)

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Comment by Anizaq on March 20, 2013 at 16:34

Dear learner, actually I am gonna sleep, when I receive the email. I am not the expert one but I think we use the past simple to retell a story and past perfect for telling that the action happened far before the next action. I am still learning too, n I hope somebody will give a clear explanation n I am sorry if my explan is incorrect

Comment by A Learner on March 20, 2013 at 16:20

Hi Anizaq, i followed tow parts of this story , i want to ask about the using the past simple and past perfect.

Comment by Anizaq on March 20, 2013 at 14:05

O..no Anele...it's not the mother of his children. wait for the part 3. thanks for the comment


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Comment by Anele on March 20, 2013 at 13:46

hmmmm......suspenseful!  Who is that person who took the father away from his child?  Must be the child's mother!  

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