Writing Challenge: Pretty Paragraphs

If you take a look around yourself, you can spot many many beautiful things, let it be the endless colourful sky or the earth with all what God has put on it. One thing that came on my mind, thinking of all pretty things around me, was you. Do you let me introduce you to the audience?

It's a couple of months that I am in love with you. I, somewhat accidentally, spotted you in a shop when I was trying to find a suitable gift for my mother, my mother-in-law, and myself! I insisted that we, my husband and I, buy you and your other two sisters. I was really happy to have you.

Sometimes, I compare you to a baby. You ,much more than food and water,need so much care, love and attention to be always happy and well, so does a baby. It is good to have you before giving birth to a child, since taking care of you trains me how to give love and attention non-stop, no matter how silent you might be. I need to look for signs and signals in you to learn about your mood. If you're sad, I have to change your mood by making a change in your place and how you are treated. If you're happy, you can give me so much energy and love, and I'll be happy, too.

You are a pretty angel in my life.To me, you are a symbol of pure and natural lively life. God loves us so much; I can know this by looking at you and all other pretty things He has given us. Yeah, you are such a pretty plant, my dear Coleus! I love you.

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Comment by Mr. Bob on July 1, 2013 at 7:23

A pretty paragraph or four. The best thing with the Coleus is that if it breaks you can put the piece in a glass of water and it will make roots for a new Coleus.  Also they come in lovely colors. When I was young my mother used to keep a few in the kitchen window as the were growing roots. She would give them to friends and they would give her different ones.

Comment by Sono on June 30, 2013 at 12:40

Zahra nice emotions you shared us, i liked your angle of thinking

Comment by Zahra on June 29, 2013 at 22:19

My dear Grace, 

It is so nice of you. Thanks so much for your kind comment here.

Have all the best.

:)

Comment by Zahra on June 29, 2013 at 22:18

Dear Mahgol,

Your plant is pretty and has a pretty friend which is you. I love plants so much! They are created to provide us, creatures, with Oxygen. So we owe to them. We should take care of them carefully. As a result we'll stay alive!

Thanks for your precious comment here.

Be well.

:)

Comment by Zahra on June 29, 2013 at 22:07

Hi dearest Tara.

It's always a pleasure to have your pretty words on my writing challenges. You are such a great teacher for me.

Thanks so much for the correction notes. 

I guess I should use the present perfect tense there. Am I right?

"It has been a couple of months that I have been in love with you."

Thanks again for your kind words.

Have a beautiful time.

:)


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Comment by Grace on June 28, 2013 at 14:08

Beautiful post! Zahra, your coleus has a kind owner who is attentive to it and loves it much. How lucky it is! :)

 

Comment by Mahgol on June 28, 2013 at 9:47

Thanks Zahra!

When I was reading your blog, I could guess you are talking to your plant which causes me the exact same feeling for my new pretty .

her pretty look now is :


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Comment by Tara Benwell on June 27, 2013 at 14:46

Hi Zahra, 

I love the creative way you tackled this month's writing challenge. For those who don't know, this form of narrative is called "second-person" point of view. The narrator tells the story to "you" and "you" is another character in the story. When the narrator uses "I" it is called "first-person narrative". When the narrator use "he/she" it is called "third person". 

I figured it was going to be some sort of pet, and was very surprised that you were writing to your pretty coleus plant. I loved this post!

Corrections:

One thing that came on to my mind

Can you fix the verb tense in this sentence: 

It's a couple of months that I am in love with you.

Comment by Sima on June 27, 2013 at 12:23

I wish to have grandma to can do the same thing thanks :(

Comment by Zahra on June 27, 2013 at 12:16

My lovely Sahar,

Thanks for leaving your kind words here. Yeah! Coleus is so beautiful and friendly. :)

Have a beautiful time.

:)

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